Thursday, February 5, 2009

"Wild Surprise" by Sierra from Miss Parish's Class

Ring! Ring! Ring! “Hello?”
“Hey, it’s Sierra! Can my mom, speak with you?”
“It’s Sierra’s birthday today, and I was wondering if Baylee could come over,” blurted my mama.
“Sure, why not,” replied Mrs. Keesha.
Once I finally figured out that Baylee could come, I rushed off to get ready. It takes thirty minutes to get from my house to her house. We were going to be at her house to pick her up at 12:00, so I had thirty minutes left to get ready. I brushed my teeth, combed my hair, and was headed out the door. Knock! Knock! As soon as Baylee swung the door open, I quickly explained that we could watch the Bee Movie and then head to the mall! Dothan, Alabama here we come! After we’d been driving a while, I realized that this was definitely not the way to Dothan. Mom announced that we were going to Wild Adventures! No way! I was more excited than a child on Christmas morning. Mom instructed that we fasten our seat belts and prepare for a long trip. Baylee and I fell asleep with in the first five minutes. We woke up at about 3:00 p.m. We had one hour left until we would be there so we played my Nintendo D.S. (or video game) for the rest of the drive.

Suddenly, I spotted a Ferris wheel out of the corner of my eye. We’re here! We found a place to park in the front and checked in. As quick as lightening, we were headed off to ride a roller coaster and eat some Dippin’ Dots. It was hard to decide what to ride. There were so many choices. Baylee and I decided on the Swamp Thing. Boy was that a wild ride! When that was over, we raced over to ride some more rides. Exhausted after all the excitement, we decided to drag ourselves over to the creak to see the fire woks show. It was amazing! I had never seen anything like it before. My mom decided she wanted to go to all the shops. Since it was so close to Christmas, we even met Santa and Mrs. Clause. We got to sit on their laps and take a picture. The perfect ending to a marvelous day!

In the end, we got home at 10:00pm. Baylee and I stayed up all night talking about how much fun we had and even sang a little karaoke. The night ended with a little bit of popcorn that my mama had cooked as one of my birthday presents. I will never forget my amazingly, wild surprise!

5 comments:

Anonymous said...

I love your your story.It was awesome. Anna B.

Mrs. McDaniel, Principal said...

Sierra, it sounds like a great day to have! You were so descriptive and used similes in a nice way. I can't wait to talk to you and see if this day really happened or was a made up story. You really made it sound real!

Anonymous said...

Sierra that was an amazing story and I know that you are an amzing writer!!!your b.f.f crystal

Anonymous said...

i have to admit that this was a pretty kool story even though your only in 4th grade.....just kiddin..lol kayla

Anonymous said...

prefect write another one



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